Two in two days! Yum. You are really a good writer - and I say that objectively. I am always impressed by description and descriptive dialogue that propels the story forward. We're not staying still in this story, while description sets the scene but instead, the description of...say Cordy's voice calling his name...advances the narrative...the way he hears her and then she's in the room. Not a wasted word, nothing awckward. Argh. I'm probably farking this all up. Suffice it to say - Story good. C/A pretty.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2005-10-18 01:27 am (UTC)Yum.
You are really a good writer - and I say that objectively. I am always impressed by description and descriptive dialogue that propels the story forward. We're not staying still in this story, while description sets the scene but instead, the description of...say Cordy's voice calling his name...advances the narrative...the way he hears her and then she's in the room. Not a wasted word, nothing awckward.
Argh. I'm probably farking this all up. Suffice it to say -
Story good.
C/A pretty.